What works well
The skating section works a little better now
Even Better If
I do not understand why Alex is lip syncing and the weird shadow in the dance studio is evident! It is clear this is not Josh!
What you need to do is pop the lip syncing Josh did back in, (the non wobbly ones) colour correct is needs be. Speak to Josh and ask him to give up one break time or lunch or registration and PLAN what you will film with him - go to the recording studio and film him. If you need me to I will ask him!
You need a scene with Cerys and another man
You need Josh (or a manly hand) finding pictures of her with another man on her phone to make the narrative clear
Check the lip syncing - it was quite in sync in your first cut and now it is out
Correct the wobbly camera
From this feedback I will need to consider all of the points above and chose the appropriate pieces of feedback to implement into my third draft in order for my final cut to be even better.
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