What went well:
Some good shots
Cery's lip syncing is excellent
Good editing ideas
some good use of different paces of shots
Good use of mise
Even Better If:
The narrative needs to be clearer - the song is about her cheating but we do not see her cheating!
Needs to be more intimacy between the two characters
What is the relevance of the skate park and why is it in his glasses reflection when they are in a shop?
Why is he skating with a different girl when it is about her cheating on him?
Is it all your own footage? I'm talking about the park section at the beginning
The lip syncing sections are too dark and the lighting changes as they sing (2.20) Why not film in the recording studio where you have light and it looks professional
The dangly flower lights are pretty off putting!
Cut the section of Josh at 0.40
The focus is off in some shots
I dislike the section between 3.04 and 3.06 - shaky camera and weird camera movement
I do not understand the editing at the end
From this feedback we will need to consider all of the points above and chose the appropriate pieces of feedback to implement into our second draft in order for our rough cut 2 to be even better than the first. From this point onwards we have decided to go on separate paths for our products.
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